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TSI Writing: You Shall Not Pass (A Bill) 7 Views


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Think about how you would rewrite the following sentences according to the directions given, and then choose the best answer for each. Keep in mind that your revision should not change the meaning of the original sentence.

Unless a majority of senators approve a bill


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All right yes i writing shmoop er's Last sentence in

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this section for you the senate cannot pass a bill

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without majority approval That's it all right so we're going

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to rewrite this thing unless a majority of senators approve

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a bill comma Well then what Schoolhouse rock may have

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taught us how a bill becomes a law but it

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didn't teach us a cz much about revising sentences by

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adding subordinated in conjunctions want want yet number schoolhouse rock

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rocking and a rolling get bennett and over the write

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out a different song there's maybe i'm just the builder

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I'm just a bill tonight i will stop thinking of

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the senses to pay more attention in maintaining logic within

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the rewritten sentence than too closely match the wards of

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the original sentence right All rights while the rewritten sends

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mentions a bill in the introductory claws we'll just replace

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the words a bill with a pronoun it so that

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we're not talking about two different bills you know like

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clinton and cosby or something So what D it will

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not pass that's the right answer Unless a majority of

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senators approve a bill it will not pass that's it

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We don't want to pete a bill in the remaining

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part of the sentence which will be both were done

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in repetitive saying the same thing again and again again

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and confusing so just get rid of a b and

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c it will not pass i'm just a schmuck I'm 00:01:27.549 --> [endTime] only issue

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